I've posted my query letter three times before now, each time with slight modifications. I hope this one I post will be better! Please comment, critique, and suggest in the comments section below (or in an email if you feel the need). I appreciate any and all feedback, but especially negative feedback. That's the only way you can grow right? Maybe, or I'm just masochistic. We'll see.
Anyways, here it is.
In the year 2015, the Mags and the Howlas brought their unending holy war to the planet Earth in a blaze of fire. A millennium later and Briok Cwartel is born into an era of uneasy peace as final heir to the throne of Mags - the last Magna Beast. The immortal Amar, possessed with a desperate need to die, guides Briok’s journey as half-human, half-Mag after his father’s death. With new rumblings in the perpetual war between Mags and Howlas, Amar must train Briok to kill the enemy before the reaper shows its face.
Standing in the way is an enormous mafia civil war, led by the arrogant Tory Cross against his former mentor Howard Crim. After the death of his brother and nephew Tory uses his position as “largest Howlian boss east of Atlantia” to bring fire upon Howard’s doorstep. His mad rage threatens to kill Briok at the birth of his journey, and bring down the well-ordered society of Atlantis. With a host of enemies bearing down upon him, Amar enacts a battleplan that could prove to be his ruin, and his salvation.
My debut novel The Proxy Wars: Dramatis Personaeis a blend of science-fiction fantasy and at 102,000 words mixes world building with raw emotion to paint the portrait of a realistic future.
Again, please comment, critique, and suggest! Does this delineation of the plot grab your interest? Does it excite you for what's to come? Or does it bog you down with too much information? Do the events throw you off and strike you as silly? I look forward to your comments! Until next time then.